Paragraph Writing
Writing Topics: How do you spend your day?
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someone can help me edit wrong in the text below i'm thank a lot my love when i was young i live in happy family happiness i felt family's happy when i grow up i felt a other happy that's happy in love .sice i can't know what is love ,i like girls and on one day i had meet a girl in clothing store i felt love her but i can't speak because she had boyfriend .then i had tried see her as myfirend long time when i know she had said goodbye her's love i think that i can say with her about my love one day i had invited her goes to coffee when we go back home i had said "i love you" she doesn't bilieve but i still expressed my love as six month prusue on day 14/2 she had accep my love. I was happied so so much, the happy seem is coming with me, can say our love is very nice, there are fun memories and boring memories, to now we were in love for long but love is love! There are things happened with us, I left home to come a morden city, where I can study and she stayed our country, the frist time our loving also nice but seem a life on the morden city made me changed, I worried about her so much and can say, now I think about my future so much when I’m in my home. But in my heart always has her. For me she’s a happy, she helped me that I have today. I don’t know do how to thank her, maybe I’ll to try to study well and for her a great happy. I hope I’ll success. Her love for me very irresistible. I happy so because I have a girlfriend so great. In my heart only has her! but present we had said to goodbye.
Hi Tam, Please take a look at the corrected text below: (and as I see that you should write simpler story, and use the right English structures, don't just translate from your native language into English) someone can help me edit wrong things in the text below, i’m thankful/grateful a lot.(or Thanks a lot) --------------------- my love, When I was young I lived in a happy family. And I when I was grown-up, I have another happiness; that’s the happiness in love. From the time, I didn't know what love is, I like girls. and one day I met a girl in a clothing store, I felt I liked her , but I couldn’t talk to her because she was with a boyfriend. Then I tried see her as my firend. And some time ago, I knew that she had said goodbye her love, then I thought that I could talk to her about my love for her. One day I invited her for coffee. when we said "goodbye" at the coffee shop,I said to her, “I love you.” She didn't believe, but I still expressed my love within six month of time. Then, it was on 14/2, she accepted my love. I was happy so so much, the happiness seemed coming to me. It is possible to say that our love is very nice. ------------------Sorry I'm busy now, I have to go, I will do it more later -----------------. there are fun memories and boring memories, to now we were in love for long but love is love! There are things happened with us, I left home to come a morden city, where I can study and she stayed our country, the frist time our loving also nice but seem a life on the morden city made me changed, I worried about her so much and can say, now I think about my future so much when I’m in my home. But in my heart always has her. For me she’s a happy, she helped me that I have today. I don’t know do how to thank her, maybe I’ll to try to study well and for her a great happy. I hope I’ll success. Her love for me very irresistible. I happy so because I have a girlfriend so great. In my heart only has her! but present we had said to goodbye.
Tam, You made the wrong topic, you got lost when you put your writing in this post. This topic is about "how do you spend your day?". It is not about your love story. Good day!
thank englishgose a lot when you have free time please please help me edid the rest i'm thanks
how do you spent your day? about me .my family had send to give me 1500.000d/a month what i must about it? eating my money in a month is 500 and room my money is 400 petrol my money is 300 there're fixed so i have 300.000d/a month spend relax so a day i just can be spend 10.000 it's very little
My job is as a packer in the locksmith company. I usually wake up early on weekdays. I always arrive to my company at 6.50 AM because I start work at 7 AM and finish 3 PM. I have three friends work with me in warehouse. They come same time but sometimes they finish late. In the company I have two times to rest: breakfast is 15 minutes and lunchtime is 30 minutes. At workplace, I do the picking lists, I follow the orders and pick what the customer needs is. Then I pack and make the address label, after that I bring my paperwork to receptionist makes invoice for the order. It is very easy job, once day I can do many order. I hope I will be a locksmith in the future
Tam, The topic "How do you spend your day?" means "What do you do everyday?" It is not about how much money you spend a day, or month. Please rewrite it, we will help you to correct your writing.
Hi Hung Lam, Please take a look at your corrected writing below carefully: The corrected word(s): "---" -------------------------------------------------------------- My job is as a packer in the locksmith company. I usually wake up early on weekdays. I always arrive "at" my company at 6.50 AM because I start work at 7 AM and finish 3 PM. I have three friends "who" work with me in warehouse. They come "to work at the" same time, but "they" sometimes finish late. In the company I have two times to rest: breakfast is 15 minutes and lunchtime is 30 minutes. At workplace, I do the picking lists, I follow the orders and pick what the customer needs is. Then I pack and make the address label, after that I bring my paperwork to receptionist for "making" invoice for the order. It is very easy job, "one" day I can do many "orders". I hope I will be a locksmith in the future.
How do you spend your day. I got up early this morning because last night I took a laxative to help me control my bowel movement, perhaps. But I only do this when I have no class on the following day. Today is our national holiday for all the Filipinos and for the moslems, celebrating their Id Al Fitr. My sisters are with me, because it is their working holiday. After I woke up, I do my usual routine every morning, such as washing my face, brushing my teeth, and changing my sleeping clothes to everyday attire. We don't prepare breakfast, because we are body conscious, trying to lose some weight. We are gathered in the living room in the morning, facing our own laptops, doing each own stuff, like watching asia novela, and visiting sites like facebook, yahoo, youtube, and surfing other sites. We do this the whole day and watching a T.V. for a quite time. I usually cook for lunch and dinner, but for the people of three, cooking is easy and spends less time to prepare. I brought my washed clothes outside to dry-up under the sun. And I watered the plants in the pots infront of our patio. These are the things I did this whole day, just spending my time with my sisters inside our house. And never had the chance to leave our house to do other stuff. It is better to be inside the house rather than wandering outside under the intense heat of the sun, and polluted air from smoke belching vehicles.
Hello Marie Rose, Your writing is good, but please remember when we talk about things we do everyday, "the simple present tense is used". Some of your sentences in the writing uses the simple past tense. below are some of those and they are corrected. --------------------------------- ......I usually cook for lunch and dinner, but for the people of three, cooking is easy and spends less time to prepare. I bring (brought) my washed clothes outside to dry-up under the sun. And I water(watered) the plants in the pots in front (infront) of our patio. These are the things I do(did) the whole day, and I just spend my time with my sisters inside our house. And I never have the chance to leave our house to do other stuff. It is better to be inside the house rather than to wander outside under the intense heat of the sun, and in the polluted air from smoke belching vehicles. ---------------------------------- Hope this can help you more!
could anyone help me edid text below? i'm thanks after finished study now have you free time and can we go to drink coffee ? i will wait outside shool gates oke are you go to work by motorbikes? so where will we go to drink coffee? if near there i think have coffee vuon xanh shop and coffee thuy truc shop if to far i must go back home to take my motorbike then we will go oke you like go to drink coffee somewhere spend for student or somewhere other professionals more i will guider you go anywhere if you want as i had said with you through e mail i just a student and my family don't rich i come from the country .may say that this is first i communication and exchange with foreigners that you. my element not like as your lived in HCM city i have not conditions .i start learn english when i live in HCM city i had learn two course english at school there're IC0 and IC1 and present i learning IC2 i felt to indulger about it but really also difficult to learn it i just want to proficiency in communication i think i just tries good my study then i can suitable with everything my prarent spend for me if i'm defeated on road to study then i think i can't look back home i felt loose face when i see my parents they 're very sweat to make money give me use in my study i'm thankfull their my conditions is success on road but i did chose i can find work stable and especally i must to make money and then send for my family,i want to requite labout of their spend for me i did think so much,sometime i go to beb i have dream about it.mental and energrg in my study i had make from to think there about me when i did get in to touch i think that are you eary talk and meet eary and you're eary to please or hard to please .... i want to like you .and i want to learn from you.and so much ask put forward and tonight i had met you i felt happy can you help me white you have free time ? i want to do course english at outside but i can't because my family have not get enough money i don't know what more i can just to teach oneself .may say that my ability very bab i weak more in your class but i will try more could you tell me where are you ? and you have merrage yet or you are single
Hello Tuyen, I am sorry to say that your writing has so many problems in there, that I don't know I can start to help you to correct. Therefore, I would like to give you some suggestions below: 1. Your writing is too long. Please make it short and simple when you writing something. 2. You should make your idea clear in a simple sentence, which will help people understand your writing easier. --------------------- I am so sorry about this, I can not help you with this writing. Please contact us at for more help.
hello englishgoes .this time i'm busy by my work. i can write other topics in here ,example about life or study or ....ect...
Hi Englishgoes here's my short sentences in lieu of the topic " How do you spend your day" Thank you for advance for your help to correct my grammar. I am working as Personal Assistant in a multi national company in Midlle East my boss always keeping me busy and aside in my daily works routine, I'm always do my best to attain the objectives of our company, I do a lot of planning execute my full involvement in our operation. Nevertheless,I do a lot of works whick is out of my job responsibilities like; going out with my boss to driven the car for her meeting with our clients etc. But I'm doing this not only for my boss but for the company benefits as well, make an effort to reach my goal. After my office work at 5pm, I do workout everyday at the Gym for 1 hour, after workout going home and prepare my dinner. And before I sleep, I do relax & watching TV for 2-3 hours then going to sleep at 10pm. I do wake up at 6am and before I take a shower I do regular exercise for 15 min, after shower I take my breakfast. My House is near in my office work, as my daily habit, I'm walking everyday going to my office for 10 min and vice versa. At around 7:55am I'm in the office and start my new day.
Hello! Englishgoes, thanks for correction and advised. More power to you. Regards, Brent
Hi, Englishgoes. This is my first time join your website but I'm very excited and and I think it is good resources for who is seeking website to learning and improving their English skill. I will post the topic "How do spend your day?", thank you in advance for your assistance. I want to talk about my holiday that is my favourite day because if I discribe about how I spend time in my usual day I think that most of us have same things to talk about. But in your holiday each people have diferent thing to do in this day. Below is how I spend in my holiday. In the morning I have breakfast together with my husband after that we clean the house. In the afternoon we visit my family and have lunch with my parents or my parents in law. In the evening we sometimes hang out with my friends like go to Karaoke or coffee shop. I like this time a lot because you can take holiday to relax and recharge energy for you body to start the new work day so you can work more efficiently. And the importance thing that you can have time for your family to share with each other the happiness as well as the sadness in your life.
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Hello to you all! When the sun rises, I often go for a walk along the road. I get up early to see the sunrise. What a beautiful day! afterward, I have breadfast with a loaf of bread and some sweetpotatoes. I start my new day from going to my university,and then I usually stop by the library. I really like standing to read books for a long time. It is interesting, isn't it? After leaving school, I sometimes go to the bookstore or the supermarket. I do not buy anything, only see around. It is time to turn back home. I am so hungry that I can eat a gaint cake. Therefore, I buy some biscuits to nibble. It is pleasant to see grogrammes on TV. And I can surf in the internet for relaxing. Of course, I must study my lessons till 10:00. It's high time for going to bed...
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i"ll talk about ad el fitr and how i spent it . i stayed in home my father is refusing to me going out with my friend because all the street was very crawded and we heared in the news about provacation with agroup of girls by rudeness men and this is the reason for i didn"t go out and i decided to made asmall party in my house and invited all my friends to attend this party which was my birth day and i really spent the best day in my life i enjoyed it . my friends gave me gifts . i was so happy about their gifts
Hello Marwa, Please check out your writing correction below: I just tried to fix some mistakes you have, but I didn't change your writing. It means that this writing can be rewritten in a better way.
Well my day is usually unlike any other school day. I wake up at around 7 o'clock.I leave for school about 8 o'clock.I chat with my friends,play games,eat and wait patiently for the afternoon bell. I go to lessons and review today's work.I go home complete my homework and go to sleep.
Well my day is usually unlike any other school day. I wake up at around 7 o'clock.I leave for school about 8 o'clock.I chat with my friends,play games,eat and wait patiently for the afternoon bell. I go to lessons and review today's work.I go home complete my homework and then go to sleep.
Please check my English: How do you spend your yesterday? Yesterday i woke up at 8 am then get freshed by 10 am and had my breakfast. At around 11 am i went to bank to do some work and came back at 1 pm. Then i prepared lunch for my family. In evening i went outside for Walk with friends and returned back to home at 8 pm. Then at last had my dinner with family and then we all slept at 10 pm.
Morning 7am- Get Up bath 8.45am- Lunch 9.30am to 5.30pm Busy in College 6pm to 11.30pm spend in Home Work, Designing, Internet surfing, with friends 8.30pm Dinner 11.30pm- to bed
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